Writing Reflection - Mahara

WALT:Freestyle Write about an image.

Today our teacher asked us to write a story about a picture. This is what I wrote. tell me what you think in the comments

The wind rushed through her hair as she descended the
mountain at great speed. For most children this will be
exhilarating, even terrifying experience but for Lucy it was
just ordinary journey to school.

At first lucy was terrified of the zip line but then she got
use to it. Lucy lived on in the enchanted rainforest high at
the peak of the mountain.an down below was a village of
wonders. She was like a hawk eyeing out the village and
admiring the beautiful landscape.

Her school was very unique it had different cool things about it.
They let bring mufti, and you were allowed to play fortnite
there whenever you want unlike my school it is the opposite.

One morning she woke up late for school so she took the
zip line down even though she has been on it several time
she still get a shock every time she go on it. It is like a different
shocking experience.

As she rushed into the doors of her school she forgot her
bag so she a to go back up the the mountain and then she
got her bag witch was filled of lollies treats and other nice
things that you would like to eat.